I didn't know whether or
not I was allowed to blog a personal work, it doesn't have much correlation
with what we are studying. But it does focus on isolationism and has themes
similar to Prufrock, kinda. I will ask you in class if it is okay. Alright now
I am just rambling.
Lua
A cheesy romance .
By Svennie.
We sat in a perfectly symmetrical
classroom, the desks impeccably aligned; the temperature a comforting 72
degrees, all staring at the white board which somehow always managed to stay a
flawless white. Even the scent of the room had a comfortable feel to it, it was
sort of a mix between vanilla and amber and every time I walked in I was
overcome with a sense of serenity. Our teacher’s monotone voice echoed
throughout the history classroom, doing injustice to the bloody battles that
were once fought, Mrs. Whitford was the definition of a boring teacher. She was
old and had greyish brown hair and she didn’t pay much mind to the kids in the
back who joked and fooled around. She did her job and no more. Our classroom
was on the fourth floor, overlooking the campus, making it hard to concentrate.
I would start with my eyes focused on Mrs. Whitford but over time they would
glaze over to the bright green grass just past the window, despite my hardest
attempts to remain engaged.
“And class that is how
the Kansas Nebraska act led to the emergence of the republican….”
My mind wandered to
spring break, while all the other students will be partying and having a good
time I will be at home getting yelled at by my father and studying. It’s always
difficult visiting him, he’s constantly urging me to come yet he never seems to
want me there when I do. He’s never quite been the same since he came back from
his tour in the Middle East, but I never understood why. It doesn’t matter to
me, we were never close and talking with him consists of him trying to get me
to join the military. He doesn’t understand that I’ve never wanted that life,
never have never will.
“…and on that note,
class is over, have a good day students” Mrs. Whitford opened the door, smiled
and let us go. I slouched my way down stairs to the college café.
“One Mango smoothie” I
handed the cashier a five, waited for my change and sat down on a stool nearby.
I could hear thunder rolling in from far off and smiled. I loved rain. I rested
my head in my open palms; eyes fixed at the little bits of mango inside my
smoothie and began to doze off.
I
woke up to the cashier muttering something to me but I shut it out and listened
to the rain instead. She spoke a little louder then, this time while clutching
my shoulder, “Sir you are going to have to leave.” I frowned; the thought of
returning to my empty dorm destroyed me. I always felt uneasy whenever my
roommate Sam left early for vacation. I don’t know, there’s just something
about being in there alone that gets to me.
“Could
I stay for a little longer?” She looked puzzled and seriously considered
letting me stay for a moment, but then shook her head slowly; a silent decline.
She looked down as if not being able to meet me in the eye. “No I don’t think I
can do that I am really sorry.” Then I really looked at her for the first time
and I noticed how tired her eyes looked and how messy the place still was. It
would be unfair of me to stay, so I gathered my things and got up, slurping
down the last of my smoothie. And with a heavy sigh I zipped up my coat up,
clenched my fists and trudged out of the warmth and into the storm.
I
seemed to ignore the rain as it drenched my backpack and clothes. It wasn’t
ever a long walk to my dorm, but the fact that Sam wasn’t going to be there
saddened me. I walked right by the college cafeteria and looked up to the right
to where my dorm was supposed to be, I could see through the window that the
light was off and I knew that the clean dark room would be a source of
loneliness. Instead of walking the two minute trip to my dorm, I decided to
head into the city. I sat down on a wet bench waiting for the campus bus; I
knew the bus would take at least twenty minutes to get to me so I let my mind
wander on to the Bio Medical Engineering tests that were going to be needed to
study for. Amidst the countless facts and thoughts circling in my head the bus
arrived. The first thing I noticed was the worn down and tired look
of the bus driver, she had her eyes closed and asked me for my money, her voice
was raspy and exhausted. Sorrow filled my heart and the urge to help her kicked
in, instead of reaching into my pocket and handing her the three dollars for
the bus ride I reached into my backpack, grabbed my wallet, and handed her a
twenty. I began to search for a seat but the lady interrupted me “hey you got
me a twenty dollar bill lemme get chu change for that”.
Ello Svennie! I really enjoyed reading some of your personal work. I found myself wanting to read more when I got to the end! I want to know what happens to the main character. The title is "A Cheesy Romance." Does he meet someone on the bus? Does he meet someone in the city? I want to know! You used a lot of interesting adjectives that added to the imagery of the story. I could picture the scenes in my head while I was reading. The only thing I had a hard time picturing was what the boy looked like. What color hair does he have? What color are his eyes? How tall is he? That is the only description you seemed to have left out. Otherwise, you have many detailed descriptions. I liked how you showed the main character's personality. The interaction between him and the bus driver showed his sensitive character and warm heart. I think that the background of the boy and the father's relationship foreshadows events to come in the future if you continue with this story. I think that the his relationship with his father will cause difficulties if he ever finds his "cheesy relationship." I'm still puzzled by the title because it could lead the story in so many directions. The main character might find a a loving relationship. He might form a better relationship with his father. He might find a nice relationship with himself. Who knows! If you ever finish it, then let me know because I would love to read the rest of it.
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